tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post7453437353522323382..comments2019-04-26T23:25:00.063-07:00Comments on My life:A set of MCQs: Scene 1jhinujhahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13936819592082469807noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post-14455121423376021222010-03-26T10:58:25.237-07:002010-03-26T10:58:25.237-07:00Tres bien. When is the next part of the story goin...Tres bien. When is the next part of the story going to presented when the wicked dark man walks into the scene.. literally? :)Amritha Rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15214437742338805427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post-62969439666368405822010-03-25T06:40:28.206-07:002010-03-25T06:40:28.206-07:00@ Amritha: thanks. Agree that the one line in betw...@ Amritha: thanks. Agree that the one line in between is a bit jarring. Made a small change and sounds Ok now<br />.<br />I have tried poetry but most of it are the intellectual property of some body else's for the next 10 years :( <br />cant make them public,sorry :Djhinujhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13936819592082469807noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post-61882904105187638202010-03-25T05:43:05.412-07:002010-03-25T05:43:05.412-07:00The line "Indeed, if one were to ..... he was...The line "Indeed, if one were to ..... he was wrong" doesn't flow with the next line about the somnolent breeze. Also the idea that a mere indolent descent of a dry dessicated ( also note that dry and dessicated are synonyms and one is redundant here) leaf would destroy the whole scene doesn't add up to the fact the somnolent breeze doesn't do much damage as one were led to believe. Other than that the imagery is brilliant and very "Indian fiction" y. Have you every tried poetry?Amritha Rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15214437742338805427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post-46059995605771545352010-03-25T01:56:43.493-07:002010-03-25T01:56:43.493-07:00nicely done, i liked the whole image if the lake, ...nicely done, i liked the whole image if the lake, reminded me of india gate...<br />yet, perhaps paragraphs would have helped...sometimes the words overwhelm you with sheer verbosity..Pushkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13460650637327434823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-916165334666003229.post-71754130938869986132010-03-24T09:12:44.639-07:002010-03-24T09:12:44.639-07:00bhai kya likte ho, thoda toh reham kiya karo. At l...bhai kya likte ho, thoda toh reham kiya karo. At least one line should be there which your followers could understandBhaskar Singhhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02399695817190602906noreply@blogger.com